Expand your essay to at least 10 pages by incorporating the peer feedback found below. Update your paper by using editing and revising skills.
As you go over your peer feedback, make sure you consider whether you think the suggestions are valid, and don’t apply those that you know to be incorrect. However, it’s helpful to be open to changes, so consider all feedback carefully.
Here are the requirements for this week’s draft:
• Your essay should be a Persuasive Research Paper
• Have a Cover page, in APA style
• Have a References page, in APA style
• Have 3-5 scholarly sources cited in the body of the paper in APA format.
• Have 3-5 scholarly sources with full citations on a References page in APA format.
• Be a minimum of 10 pages in length
• Contain a clear, debatable, thesis statement
• Be double-spaced, Times New Roman, 12pt font, and have 1-inch margins
Peer Feedback:
1) Hi Shannon,
What an interesting topic you chose. Everyone is affected with healthcare cost nowadays but it hasn’t really brought too much debate on how the majority is able to manage the cost of healthcare especially with people loosing jobs due to the pandemic. Introduction part delivered good important information though one of the main points tackled which was Training and Maintaining New Technologies was something that didn’t really caught my attention and was more focused on topics that I can relate and witnessed about the rising cost of insurance. There were some grammars that needs to be corrected and I did this by using a grammar check app. The 3rd main point which was the uninsured Americans that really caught my attention and became curious on how the government as well as those uninsured are able to get the care needed without the insurance. Overall, the work was format clearly and with good flowing discussion.
2) A fabulous start, Shannon. I’m impressed with the organization you have so far. 🙂
I do have a few suggestions at this point:
-use more sources to expand your draft’s length and further support your argument at the same time